OK. Firstly, there's a decorative band at the bottom which doesn't add anything to the general ambience. I hardly noticed it to start with, but after a while I wondered what it was doing there. Secondly, the text is often difficult to make out against the background; maybe outlining would help? Next, the dialogue is occasionally a little too quick -- I'd be looking at the facial expression of one character as the other character's dialogue flashed past. Lastly, there's a lot of exposition between two essentially static people: movement of some kind could add interest?
I didn't make it to the end of the prequel either, sorry. Like I said, apologies if this is all rather negative...
I didn't make it to the end of the prequel either, sorry. Like I said, apologies if this is all rather negative...