Main Character (1st critic post)

DanClarke · Thu 08/04/2004 00:59:23

Hi, i introduced myself in the General section, here's my first design of my main character, a young teenage girl (yet to be named). Apologies if the image appears a little 'squashed'. Hope you like it.

Evil · Thu 08/04/2004 01:09:23

Wow, looks great. Only thing I can see, is that her hat might need a bit more contrast. Theres also a pixel "box" above her right eye that could be rounded a bit, IE into a backwards L.

Darth Mandarb · Thu 08/04/2004 01:48:46

That's pretty good!

I would suggest moving her eye a little closer to her nose. (the eye on our left her right.)

Where's her body?

DanClarke · Thu 08/04/2004 01:59:07

Quote from: Darth Mandarb on Thu 08/04/2004 01:48:46
That's pretty good!

I would suggest moving her eye a little closer to her nose. (the eye on our left her right.)

Where's her body?

Yeah it's at an angle as if shes looking to 1 side, if you get me? But i see what you mean. Body will come soon enough lol.

BerserkerTails · Thu 08/04/2004 05:21:09

The eyes and general shape of the head remind me alot of HergÃ©'s work (Creator of Tintin)! I like!

DanClarke · Thu 08/04/2004 15:38:15

the same character stood

Ginny · Thu 08/04/2004 17:26:29

Great character! Her face looks older than her body though (i.e. the body of a kid the face of a teenager/young adult. I'd make her legs longer (they look odd), so she's taller, define her breast some more, etc.
Unless she's supposed to be a Tomboy kinda girl, and young, in which case she looks great but she needs a younger face and longer legs. Maybe the face is just my imagination, it could look fine with longer legs...

Kweepa · Thu 08/04/2004 18:16:57

Superb!
The shorts look a little flat maybe...

loominous · Thu 08/04/2004 19:58:04

Some modifications:

Really nice character btw.

DanClarke · Thu 08/04/2004 22:34:23

Quote from: GinnyW on Thu 08/04/2004 17:26:29
Great character! Her face looks older than her body though (i.e. the body of a kid the face of a teenager/young adult. I'd make her legs longer (they look odd), so she's taller, define her breast some more, etc.
Unless she's supposed to be a Tomboy kinda girl, and young, in which case she looks great but she needs a younger face and longer legs. Maybe the face is just my imagination, it could look fine with longer legs...

I went for the age of about 14/15 and she is supposed to have a tomboy sort of look. The heads a little out of proportion ala SamNMax. I know what you mean about the legs, but i think its because of the big boots, and i don't want her looking too 'lanky'

Thanks for the input though

Loominous: Good changes, ill look into them, i didnt realise her jaw looked so chiselled, and i wasnt all that happy with the eyes anyway

Thanks.

DanClarke · Fri 09/04/2004 00:35:31

Here's the revised image, let me know what you all think in comparison, inspired by some of the changes loominous made, so thanks for that

Valzebnik · Fri 09/04/2004 14:51:46

I understand that u used 2 colors on every piece of clothing,but u might want to do some more work with the pants (maybe even with 3 colors) because as a matter of fact they do look flat!!

DanClarke · Fri 09/04/2004 19:42:22

Quote from: Valzebnik on Fri 09/04/2004 14:51:46
I understand that you used 2 colors on every piece of clothing,but you might want to do some more work with the pants (maybe even with 3 colors) because as a matter of fact they do look flat!!

im not too worried about this at the moment, just trying to give poeple an idea of what the character will look like, ill be going over everything to make sure it looks as good as it can. Thanks for the input though.

DanClarke · Wed 28/04/2004 23:45:14

thought id poke the coals on this topic, ive revised this srite (made her smaller and given her a rucksack) for the reason that the original sprite was a bit too big and she didnt look quite as young as id wanted her to. Ive also ditched the smelly boots in favour of some converse-style sneaks, but i cant decide which i prefer. :

*UPDATE* Im going to rework the face, as i feel shes lost some of her 'prettiness', *sigh*.

Nacho · Thu 29/04/2004 00:12:11

Go for the converse shoes!

I also see her head to advanced...Maybe you're attempting to create the feeling that her bag is heavy and she is arching the back because of it, but I'm not very sure if I would like to see that pose during all the game...

BTW, all an improvement...

Igor · Thu 29/04/2004 00:27:35

Hm, i liked the first face (when it was still withouth body) the most...

As for body- i think it suggest more a child (or a slight midget, with current head) than 14-15 year old. At that age are girls/boys already a bit more developed (higher, usualy skinnier, because body mass can't really follow growth). I'd suggest to make a body a bit more stretched... or make a complete exagerated cartoon out of character (the head is still too realistic for that kind of body, in my opinion).

Here's my edit (i only stretched body in Flash, so it looks a bit odd atm).

DanClarke · Thu 29/04/2004 08:44:46

Quote from: Igor on Thu 29/04/2004 00:27:35
Hm, i liked the first face (when it was still withouth body) the most...

As for body- i think it suggest more a child (or a slight midget, with current head) than 14-15 year old. At that age are girls/boys already a bit more developed (higher, usualy skinnier, because body mass can't really follow growth). I'd suggest to make a body a bit more stretched... or make a complete exagerated cartoon out of character (the head is still too realistic for that kind of body, in my opinion).

Here's my edit (i only stretched body in Flash, so it looks a bit odd atm).

i get what you mean here, and i'm working on it. I agree, i also prefer the 1st character's face, so im trying to get it closer to that. Ill post up some ideas later on today.

DanClarke · Thu 29/04/2004 16:56:48

Ok heres an edit, i like this one, as it's more true to the orginal drawing, she has a good stance, and the sprites a good size. I'm considering changing the age of her slightly, as i'm sure you'll agree that she does look young here, but it bears no real relevance to the story, and i'm pretty happy with this one.

I know the sprites not perfect (why do you only notice the mistakes when you've uploaded it?) but it'd be great to know what people think of this character in comparison with the previous edits?

Thanks

YOke · Thu 29/04/2004 17:38:24

Yeah! I think you nailed the look with this one. I really think she looks her age now. (The big boots _did_ help.) She also got some of the "innoscence" back in her face. Good one!

Haddas · Thu 29/04/2004 18:09:46

Looks her age? She looks 9 now!