my first character animation, looking for some advice.

[Skurai]

ok, here are two pictures of my first character animation thing, one zoomed in and one not:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4.bmp

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4p.bmp

first, i'd like to ask what people think about it? and how might i make it better?

and second, i was wondering if anyone had any tips or anything for drawing the rest of the animation? (the walking poses).

thanks n.n

[mousemat]

it could do with a dark outline becuase the light outline makes the character look floresant.
very good though

[Mr Jake]

Yes, try swaping the 2 colours around (make the fill colour the outline and the outline the fill colour) and see what that looks like.

[Skurai]

thanks for the suggestions, I really appricate them. But the whole glowing, floresant look was sort of what i was giong for lol but, i'm making another copy now with the colors swapped just to see what it's like. thanks again n.n

[Skurai]

ok, i swapped the colors around, heres a link:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4pcs.bmp

better or worse then the old one?

any comments would be appreciated n.n

[BlackMan890]

normal 2x 4x


humm

*fix her left view, it looks like leftup view
*her shoes in view 2 has same shoes as view 1, fix that and fix her shoes in view 3 and 4
*also in view 3 you are not suposed to see her face, fix that
*also fix the color between her legs in view 1 and 2, it's really disturbing

[Skurai]

ok, tried a few of your suggestions *quoted below, with comments*:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4try.bmp

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4tryb.bmp

*fix her left view, it looks like leftup view
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  -----> not quite sure what you mean by this, could you clarify it for me?

*her shoes in view 2 has same shoes as view 1, fix that and fix her shoes in view 3 and 4
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  -----> Tried fixing her shoes in view 2 *dunno if it's 'fixed' or not ^^;;* also, could you point out whats wrong with the shoes in view 3 and 4?

*also in view 3 you are not suposed to see her face, fix that
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  ------> did it, but i think it was better before lol *actually, i had it so you coulden't see her face at all at first, then my girlfreind suggested i make it so you could see some of her face in view 3, oh well, let me know what you think.*

*also fix the color between her legs in view 1 and 2, it's really disturbing
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  ----> wow, i diden't noticed that.... it is kind of desturbing, but fixed now 

also, fun with colors!:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4pcsdiffcol.bmp

[viktor]

man shee looks pale. Is that supose to be like that. If not try making her skin darker.

[Mr Jake]

I like the new colours but if you are going for the 'whole glowing, floresant look' then you should stick to your original



I tried to make the legs look a bit better by removing the double pixels, Im not 100% sure about the leg on the right in the rear view.

EDIT: damnit this isnt the newest version I used, oh well Im sure you get the idea, its only the colours that changed from version to version right?

[BlackMan890]

ok, tried a few of your suggestions *quoted below, with comments*:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4try.bmp

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4tryb.bmp

1*fix her left view, it looks like leftup view
|
  -----> not quite sure what you mean by this, could you clarify it for me?

2*her shoes in view 2 has same shoes as view 1, fix that and fix her shoes in view 3 and 4
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  -----> Tried fixing her shoes in view 2 *dunno if it's 'fixed' or not ^^;;* also, could you point out whats wrong with the shoes in view 3 and 4?

3*also in view 3 you are not suposed to see her face, fix that
|
  ------> did it, but i think it was better before lol *actually, i had it so you coulden't see her face at all at first, then my girlfreind suggested i make it so you could see some of her face in view 3, oh well, let me know what you think.*

4*also fix the color between her legs in view 1 and 2, it's really disturbing
|
  ----> wow, i diden't noticed that.... it is kind of desturbing, but fixed now 

also, fun with colors!:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4pcsdiffcol.bmp

1 well instead of looking left, she is looking at this direction[img]http://www.geocities.com/jnatann/Images/arrowupleft.png[img]

2 make them even, you know, not like she is standing on her toes, make it:
_____ instead of
__----

3 well, if you see her in view 3, then you have to fix her hair in all the other 3 views

4 i can still see it, make it like hotspot did, some space between her legs, it's like looking up on girls dress *caugh* *caugh*

[Mr Jake]

hmm, I tried to fix that right leg alittle....

[Shane 'ProgZmax' Stevens]

Unless you're doing it for the gameboy, I think it could do with more color shades (hair, clothes).  Aside from that it looks really good

[Dart]

When I saw the girl, I had a sudden urge to color/shade her in. Disregard the edit if you like, as this is just for fun.

[Skurai]

wow, some really great responses, i'll try to incorperate them all into some new version which i'll hopefully have done tonight. oh, and yes, she's supose to be pale. and i really like that shaded pic  i should give that a try, thanks everybody!

[Skurai]

ok, i fixed the legs in view 1 and 2, sorta fixed the shoes, and tried shading her:

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4sha.bmp

http://jupiter.walagata.com/w/skurai/4shab.bmp

[Skurai]

here alittle demo type thing i slapped together, ok, all she can do is glide around, but she does it rather well lol:

http://www.geocities.com/darkfalz_83/girltest.zip

[Skurai]

ok, first of all, i'm having alot of trouble animating her, anybody know any good tutorials for this sort of thing?Ã,  and, i drew another little person (well, it's the same person, i'll explaine below..):

http://www.geocities.com/darkfalz_83/4pandaes.gif

http://www.geocities.com/darkfalz_83/4pandae.gif

for the game i'm thinking of making, the girl with brown hair would be the 'main character' and the girl with blue hair is actualy the same person, but sort of her alter ego, like.. another personality.

[MrColossal]

Just so you know, there's a text link at the top of your posts called modify, instead of posting 3 times in a row like you just did, you modify your last post. If someone responds to you and you want to respond to them, then you add a new post.

as for animation, maybe check this out

http://tsugumo.swoo.net/tutorial/chapter8.htm

[auhsor]

3 times in a row like you just did

4 times

Oh and try and use gif/jpg for the forums. I see that you have done that for your last post and that is good. They take up less space. Also try using the [ img] [ /img] tags (without those spaces, so we can see the picture without having to open a new page.

Comments on the pic: I like how you have progressed. You definately have made huge improvemens, and I love the new sprite but the hands look a little too big, especially on the back view.

[Skurai]

^^;; sorry for posting 4 times in a row, i won't do it anymore. And i'll try to fix the hands. but as for right now, heres my first walking animation, it sucks, but shes walking lol