A character: Brett (edit 5)

Erwin_Br · Fri 08/10/2004 16:19:05

I'd really appreciate comments, suggestions and advice on my character. (see below)

Thank you!

Edit 1: See reply #6
Edit 2 (11-8-04): See reply #11
Edit 3 (11-9-04): See reply #17
Edit 4 (11-15-04): See reply #25
Edit 5 (11-16-04): See reply #26

--Erwin

InCreator · Fri 08/10/2004 16:33:50

Change?
Definetly shoes & standing pose: He's not supported by his feet! His pose makes me think that soon the wind will blow him over.
Try a little more powerful stance.

Otherwise, hi-res look of the character looks... great!

YOke · Fri 08/10/2004 16:54:59

Just a few minor things (i love your work, so no worries

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- the fingers on his left hand looks like small sausages
- inside his right hand (between the fingers and the thumb) there's a dark patch of skin i can quite figure out what is.
- his right leg should be rotated towards the screen. as InCreator said, his feet doesn't support him.
- the outlines on his face are much sharper than the outlines on the rest of his body.
- his neck seems too long for his body. maybe shorten it or lenghten his legs or a bit of both? (this is not a critique, just a thought)

As I think I have said before: Great work!

Iwan · Fri 08/10/2004 17:07:34

I love this charactor. The style is great!

I thought Brett looked like he was leaning forward too much so I messed with his legs a bit by drawing them straighter under his torso;

(quick eddit and the shoes are still not right)

I thought the rest of his body looked cool. I think you should keep his neck long and his legs short, I think its just in with the style.

Erk · Fri 08/10/2004 21:16:57

It might help if you thicken the heels of his shoes a tad so that they don't look so much like socks.

Hawkins · Sat 09/10/2004 15:39:12

Great character, I just wonder where the zipper is on his shirt

Erwin_Br · Sat 09/10/2004 16:19:02

Changed his shoes, though I'm still not satisfied. Also changed his left hand.

--Erwin

Erk · Sat 09/10/2004 19:04:23

the shoes are way better.... you could easily get away with them in-game now, but there is room for improvement

Maybe you should make them a tad bigger again?

Evil · Sat 09/10/2004 19:47:08

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v458/evil1359/erwin_shoes.png

Meh, mine turned out small but you get the point.

Krazy · Sun 10/10/2004 01:53:26

There's something about his shoulders that looks like he's holding in some military postion. Really looks unnatural fix that.

InCreator · Sun 10/10/2004 21:26:49

Since it's quite masterful (and also difficult to draw) sprite, I didn't edit it, just tried to fix the body geometry with some guidelines.

* head back about 5-15 pixels
* one shoe looking at the "camera", green arrows showÃ,Â the direction shoe is facing at
* feet supporting now
* upper body more relaxed
* purple "X"s show place where normally fingertips should reach, but since you're going for cartoony look, it isn't very important

Erwin_Br · Mon 08/11/2004 15:13:27

Great edit, though it does make the character look a bit of a 'tough guy', while he's supposed to be a little geeky and insecure.

This is my newest version based on your, and other people's, suggestions:

More suggestions, advice and critique are very welcome.

Thanks!

--Erwin

Flippy_D · Mon 08/11/2004 19:06:56

Maybe the character should have a bit more heel (squared)? The shoe looks sort've flaccid at the moment. Bulkier shoes often look good. I can sketch it if you like.

Krazy · Tue 09/11/2004 10:44:56

His shoulders still look too stiff and unnatural you should use the arms InCreator suggested!

strazer · Tue 09/11/2004 11:28:14

Here's my take:

stuh505 · Tue 09/11/2004 17:09:27

I like Strazer's

BlackMan890 · Tue 09/11/2004 17:20:11

WOW thats a great edit, you shoould go with strazer edit

Erwin_Br · Tue 09/11/2004 21:53:43

Thanks Strazer, that's an awesome edit and exactly the pose I had in mind.

I've based my new character on this edit. As you can see, I made his legs a little longer and changed the angle a bit. Everything else is more or less the same. I also created a front view:

What do you think of the front view? Does it work?

--Erwin

Candle · Tue 09/11/2004 23:02:23

Looks real good . wish I could do that .. hides head in shame

n3tgraph · Wed 10/11/2004 09:58:13

hey erwin... I love your art!

the new sideview rocks! strazer did a nice job....

some crits for the front view:
in his front view he looks much fatter then in the sideview, try making him a little less fat

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then his hands, it looks like he has his hands behind his butt a little. I think the fingers should be visible in front of his pants (hard to explain)

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I also would make his head a little less pumped up. but that's personal I think.

For the rist I think it's awesome!

A character: Brett (edit 5)

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