Depressing MIDI v2

[Damien]

D_Rust.mid (1:25)
Made this MIDI, today, now my ears are bleeding, so I'm going to take a break for a while. In the meantime, any kind of feedback is highly appriciated, so please, reply.

[Darcness]

Very nice indeed!
My only critique is that some of the note slides just don't sound right, making the song sound slightly off-key.
Other than that, great job.

[Damien]

Thanks, I'll work on it some more tommorow.

Any more comments?

[Neil Dnuma]

I think it's good, I only wish there was a tad more "air" in it, eg. the solo instrument doesn't shut up for a micro second once it's begun (or at least that's how it feels). Other than that: Solid & Cool.

[Damien]

Thanks for the reply, I'll try to make a new version soon.

[sedriss]

I like it. It reminds me of a song in Final Fantasy 7.. cant remember which one. Good job!

[Damien]

Thanks.

2nd version, changed the guitar solo & ending:
D_Rust_v2.mid (1:42)

[cpage]

I love the thing as a whole te only thing I find is at 0:57 that build seems to lag a bit mildly off tempo it seems.

I love the guitar solo tho it sounds great

[Damien]

Thanks for the reply.

The 'lag' was intentional, I thought that was pretty obvious. I guess after hearing it too many times (in the proces of making it), I didn't find it awkward. The problem is, I don't want to remove the 'lag', but have no idea on how to make it sound better.
Any comments?

[cpage]

I kinda figured it was on purpose since it sayed on tempo throught out the rest of the song

the only thing i can think of that might sound cool it have an instument slowly slide down abd back up the whole time the build goes sort of a weird transition but its just an idea

[c53]

This song reminds me of House of the Rising Sun by The Animals. Good job by the way!

[Damien]

Thanks.

Cpage, I'm going to try out your suggestion, then post it here later on.