A whimsical scene

Tom S. Fox · Fri 25/11/2005 21:44:31

This is for my game "Adventure Game":

I'm not quite sure about the way this looks...
Any suggestions for improvement?

ManicMatt · Sat 26/11/2005 18:55:44

I'd like it better if you could see the monkey's face, even if from the side, rather than out of view!

hedgefield · Sun 27/11/2005 12:46:09

Also, where's his tail?

Babar · Sun 27/11/2005 12:55:28

Monkey butts would be directly connected to the legs, not like 2 humps in the middle of the back. You could check yourself in the mirror....or perhaps better not.

DanClarke · Sun 27/11/2005 13:27:07

lol it's an interesting image, can i just mention that i think the hand on the monkey is wrong. You can see the indent where the palm of the hand is, so i presume were looking at the palm, and after sitting here and holding my arm out like an idiot, you'll find it's a left hand on the right arm.

id also change the colour of whatever guybrush is sitting on. Are you using a restricted number of colours for the game? Because i think your style would really flourish with a greater colour range.

Dan

Tom S. Fox · Sun 27/11/2005 19:31:54

Quote from: ManicMatt on Sat 26/11/2005 18:55:44
I'd like it better if you could see the monkey's face, even if from the side, rather than out of view!

Yes, but it's hard for me to draw monkey faces.
That's why I hide it behind the legs.
But I'll give it a try.

Quote from: largopredator on Sun 27/11/2005 12:46:09
Also, where's his tail?

Crap!!!
I totaly am a idiot concerning anatomy!
But then again, I showed this image already some people and noone of them noticed it, so I guess it's not so stupid of me.
But I'm glad you pointed it out, I could have ended up in the final game!

Quote from: Babar on Sun 27/11/2005 12:55:28
Monkey butts would be directly connected to the legs, not like 2 humps in the middle of the back. You could check yourself in the mirror....or perhaps better not.

I tried do draw it like this, too, but it didn't look much better.
But I guess, I will try it again.

Quote from: DanClarke on Sun 27/11/2005 13:27:07
i think the hand on the monkey is wrong. You can see the indent where the palm of the hand is, so i presume were looking at the palm, and after sitting here and holding my arm out like an idiot, you'll find it's a left hand on the right arm.

Yes, you are right.
I noticed it already and fixed it!
The thing, Guybrush, or better yet, the Guybrush-parody is sitting on, is, by the way, a rock.
Maybe I can find a way to make it easier to recongnize as one.

So, and since it took a while, until somone answered to my post, I tried to help myself, and that's the result:

I revised the colors and the rolled-up sleeves and the monkey hand and feet, made the guy lanker, moved his pupils down, gave him sweatspots, gave his shoes clasps and maybe some other things I can't recall right now.
What do you think?
Tomorrow I will upload an image with your suggestions.

Tom S. Fox · Mon 28/11/2005 20:16:14

Alright, here is it:

And, what do you think?

Afflict · Mon 28/11/2005 20:37:55

Spank a monkey mon!

Guybrush weepwood is certainly taking a trilogy + 1 out of that monkey

Looking good, I thik the but is too big do it like ir baboons.

ManicMatt · Mon 28/11/2005 20:47:34

Superb! They're right, the arse is too big now.

Other than that, I am liking it so much more now!

Thinks:
"Cool, I've influenced a part of this person's game!"

Tom S. Fox · Mon 28/11/2005 21:02:49

Your sure did!
You are so gonna be in the credits, now!

ManicMatt · Mon 28/11/2005 21:10:27

Yay! I've never been in someone else's credits before!

Tom S. Fox · Mon 28/11/2005 21:20:45

Your are welcome!

Tom S. Fox · Thu 01/12/2005 16:07:53

Sorry, I didn't have the time to go into the internet, the last few days, so I have to dig this thread back up.

I gave my monkey an ass reduction, and I hope, it's perfect, now.
What do you think?

Krysis · Thu 01/12/2005 16:37:52

The leg looks broken to me.

ManicMatt · Thu 01/12/2005 16:39:17

Now you're just being fussy krysis!

Well, maybe Guybrush BROKE the monkey's leg!

DanClarke · Thu 01/12/2005 20:42:09

Krysis has a valid point, theoretically that leg has 3 joints, as its drawn as if theres a backside at the top, but plainly the backside is right above it.

ManicMatt · Thu 01/12/2005 23:17:50

true, but it's a cartoon. I could complain that guybrush has no nails, you know? Or no nostrils.

Nikolas · Thu 01/12/2005 23:49:42

Yes but I would also complain to you that cartoons usually have references to real life. There is something wrong with his right foot. It is of course his choice to correct it or not, but...

Krysis · Fri 02/12/2005 08:08:02

This is what I mean. You can fix the fingers too. I noticed they ain't the same lenght. That's ok I guess couse I ain't got a monkey around to check, but... the index finger on the left foot must be the same lenght as the index foot on the right one.

esper · Fri 02/12/2005 08:49:17

What the.... Krysis? What's wrong with you? The ass is actually growing again, and now, it looks like Guybrush is giving the monkey a friggin' prolapsed rectum, as the bottom of the bitticks is poking out PAST the leg!

Also, the right hand looks like it's turned around 180 (that line looks like the line you might draw to show the thumb crossing the palm, rather than a knuckle as I'm sure you intended).

The tail of the monkey also looks like you green-screened it in... the line is too thick and it looks totally like an afterthought (which, in fact, it was...)

And lastly... The monkey is Korean.

Yes... Korean...

It is custom in Korea, and many other eastern countries, to point with the chin, rather than the finger, as one beckons to a dog with his fingers...

I said all that to say this... The monkey's chin is jutting out TO THE EXTREME (i rock a mic like a vandal)... It actually looked more realistic and less forced when the monkey's head was down...

EDIT: I'm sorry, I have to say this...

You really need to work on your assmastery...