my music - need some critics please!!!!

musicMan · Fri 17/07/2009 03:55:16

hey,

i need some critics for my music...... here is one of my tunes.
any criticism is good. i'm not new to making music, but i am new to the forums and i am new to making music FOR GAMES.
don't worry about the name of the song........ inside joke with my girlfriend...

http://uploading.com/files/X5KOPTDO/Schnitzel.wav.html

cheers,
musicMan

p.s.
sorry if you got any bad impressions of me after that whole thing with Peter155......

peter155 · Fri 17/07/2009 03:56:54

nice job,i love it,you're really good

musicMan · Fri 17/07/2009 04:01:43

thanks......... $:-\$

None · Fri 17/07/2009 07:19:55

Exactly the same sentiment... Very good...
Is 'flea' in your msg a chronotrigger reference?

musicMan · Fri 17/07/2009 08:50:35

thanks......... and no..... flea is the bassist for the Red Hot Chili Peppers....... i am a bassist you see......
any sort of criticism for my track??

None · Fri 17/07/2009 09:35:00

Just curious what are you using to synthesize this? Some of the instruments sound a bit 'tinny'...
THIS IS EXTREEEEMMME Critique.
Frankly your tune is epic, it varies enough to keep from being too too repetitive.
It's catchy, and fast-paced, it's all around good.

I would like to hear you do something slow now, orchestral maybe, or soft jazz-like.
Maybe even fantasy? Think the strings in LOTR.

I really was looking for something to critique but it's hard.
I think a few places could be volumized a bit.

_EDIT_

I went back and kept listening to it, and thought that perhaps a harmony part to the main melody would be nice...
I'm posting an example to show what I mean.
http://www.charlescreations.com/harmonyexample.mp3

musicMan · Fri 17/07/2009 23:48:12

ok cool thanks for your help........... i will get right onto that slow piece you were talking about. coming soon hopefully!! thanks alot for your kind words

Old skool rulez · Sun 02/08/2009 07:59:26

very nice like the riff and layout would sound alot better with some better synths and drums and maybe some more filtering but all in all very nice

musicMan · Tue 04/08/2009 07:38:11

thanks.... but that criticism doesn't really judge my writing..... just the technology i use to write it..... $:-\$

Old skool rulez · Tue 04/08/2009 09:18:29

like i said nothing really wrong with the layout but as an artist its not just about the writing it's about the sound as a whole say for example if you were to pitch this to someone as a comercial dancy track it would fail on the drums and use ov synth.

Phemar · Wed 05/08/2009 05:59:35

Could you maybe compress it into .mp3 or .ogg? Sharing uncompressed audio on the interwebz is hardly a good idea...