C & C on a character

[Matt Frith]

Hi its me again, yippee!.

I was extremely bored at school today so I decided to doodle, and I ended up doing a pretty good character. ^_^

So I inked it and scanned it in (badly) and here is the end result.  The one on the right is the same character with the hoodie down.

Tell me what you think. Any  C&C please



~Tier~

[Ben]

Shirt and pants are too dark. Otherwise it's good..

[agsking]

Good job! Very nice and cartoony.

The only thing I see wrong with it is that there is no moulth on the first one.

[n3tgraph]

Nice pic, teiry

only thing that bothers me are the arms and the very straight mouth

[veryweirdguy]

Okay, Tier asked me to post something, so here goes...

Maybe remove the black outlines? This is just a stlye thing of course, but I am not a fan of big black outlines.

Great character though! I'd like to hear a little backstory...

[SLaMgRInDeR]

kool! the only thing i can see is on the first one the face is dark green and has no mouth, part from that it looks great, are you going to use him in a game?
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[Matt Frith]

Thanks for the criticism guys.  

-First let me explain that he has no mouth on the left picture because it makes him look mysterious.

-And i might be including him in a test game so i can practise using voice speech.

[Jimi]

give him a spliff.

[m0ds]

Nice! The one on the left reminds me of the guys in that o2 advert

[SLaMgRInDeR]

now that you mention it, me too! lol, when i first saw that advert, i didnt realize they had phones, and i thought it was going to be an advert for LP:meteora, and they were the new hybrid soldiers in discuise or something...
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