Hey all,
I was planning to make a card for my girlfriend's birthday and wanted to write a poem in it. Here's what I have so far and I realize it's not very good, but maybe with your help it could get better! I would appreciate all the help, comments, and criticisms I can get. Thank you!
my thoughts falter
and my mind lays altered
your lovely voice
and clothing choice
that alluring face
vivid in their place
your blue dress
never failing to impress
mesmerizing brown eyes
always a sweet surprise
always leaving me happy
happy birthday ashley
Update1:
my thoughts falter and my mind lays altered
in there place lays your alluring face
your lovely voice and clothing choice
your blue dress never failing to impress
mesmerizing brown eyes such a sweet surprise
your strong will which i admire still
your sense of humour so incredibly immense
the kindness in your touch oh so much
everything about you makes me happy
happy birthday ashley
I was planning to make a card for my girlfriend's birthday and wanted to write a poem in it. Here's what I have so far and I realize it's not very good, but maybe with your help it could get better! I would appreciate all the help, comments, and criticisms I can get. Thank you!
my thoughts falter
and my mind lays altered
your lovely voice
and clothing choice
that alluring face
vivid in their place
your blue dress
never failing to impress
mesmerizing brown eyes
always a sweet surprise
always leaving me happy
happy birthday ashley
Update1:
my thoughts falter and my mind lays altered
in there place lays your alluring face
your lovely voice and clothing choice
your blue dress never failing to impress
mesmerizing brown eyes such a sweet surprise
your strong will which i admire still
your sense of humour so incredibly immense
the kindness in your touch oh so much
everything about you makes me happy
happy birthday ashley